Saturday, March 20, 2010

Text Production Essay #1

What are the potential effects of global warming in terms of climate change and how they can be arrested?

Global warming has always been an earth-shattering issue as it is being concerned by all nations throughout the world. Generally, global warming refers to the gradual increase in global average temperature with respect to the increase in concentration of greenhouse gases such as carbon dioxide and methane in the atmosphere. By the end of the 21st century, global warming is likely to cause a rise in Earth’s temperature of around 2-5 degrees centigrade. (Chris Woodford 2006) This worries scientists as it may invite higher degree of climate change to the earth and therefore, it may correspond to enormous consequences on our beloved environment. Thus, the potential impacts of global warming in terms of climate change should be taken fully into attention and responsible measurements need to be implemented to arrest this problem.

One of the significant effects of global warming is the tremendous rise in temperature at North and South poles. (Chris Woodford 2006) As a result, ocean is warmed up by the increasing global temperature. According to Holli Riebeek 2007, the world’s glaciers have steadily receded, and Arctic sea ice extent has steadily shrunk by 2.7 percent per decade since 1978. The melting of ice caps and glaciers has brought to higher sea level. Currently, the world’s sea level is rising at 3 centimeters per decade. (Chris Woodford 2006) Rising sea level will enhance coastal erosion and cause more frequent coastal flooding. This problem is serious because as much as 10 percent of the world population lives in coastal areas less than 10 meters above sea level. (Holli Riebeek 2007)

On the other hand, global warming is likely to cause more erratic weather patterns on the Earth. (Chris Woodford 2006) Warmer temperature will alter weather patterns, making it likely that there will be more intense droughts and rain events. It will also lead to frequent heat waves and natural disasters such as hurricanes, tornadoes, typhoons and storms. Residents of poorer countries who do not have sufficient resources to fend off changes in climate will be affected the most in terms of widespread infectious diseases such as malaria. (Holli Riebeek 2007) Besides, frequent cases of fires are likely to take place, which may lead to deaths and air pollution.

In addition, global warming is putting pressure on ecosystem. Warmer temperature shifted the growing seasons in many parts of the globe. (Holli Riebeek 2007) Nature’s plan will be disturbed and millions of ecological creatures are going to be affected. Species that failed to adapt themselves under a hotter environment may end up facing the crisis of extinction. Also, shorter and milder winters will fail to kill some insects, thus increase the risk of damage to ecosystem by infestation.

To tackle this global crisis as to reduce the impacts of climate change, prompt actions should be taken to cut down as much as possible the emissions of greenhouse gases. People are encouraged to use efficient electricity appliances and end-use efficiency, at the same time, people are asked to practice passenger vehicle efficiency such as hybrid cars. Al Gore in his talk suggested the usage of renewable technologies and carbon-capture-and-storage technologies to further address the problem. All nations should cooperate and work together as a powerful body to deal with this global crisis by forwarding the message of awareness to the whole world.

As a conclusion, with global energy and fossil-fuel use still increasing, major climate change seems almost unavoidable. However, according to An Inconvenient Truth A Global Warming, the 2007 film directed by Davis Guggenheim, records indicated that human do have the capacity to rise above themselves and above history with determination. Thus, everyone should have the strength to change the entire planet and make this world a better place!

1 comment:

  1. 1. Is there a clear introductory sentence that introduces the subject matter and the controlling idea? What do you suggest for improvement if the introductory sentence is not clear?
    Yes, the introductory sentence is clear enough to make the readers understand the topic of the essay well. The writer introduces the subject matter and controlling idea in a good way.

    2. Is there a thesis statement given as the last sentence of the introductory paragraph? Is it clear and connected to all the topic sentences of the body paragraphs?
    Yes, the thesis statement is clear and good enough. Readers can get to know easily the overall contents of the essay from the thesis statement.

    3. Do the paragraphs have sufficient supporting details and examples? How can the organization be improved?
    All the paragraphs are supported with sufficient details, examples and facts. They are good enough to convince the readers. There is no problem regarding the organization of the essay.

    4. Are there any paragraphs which are not supported well?
    No, all the paragraphs are supported well.

    5. Are there any sentences or sections that are not clear? If so, how can they be improved?
    No, all the sentences or sections are very clear and easy to understand.

    6. Does the conclusion summarize all the main points given in the essay or restate the thesis statement? Is it clear? If not, how can the writer improve this part?
    No, I think the conclusion is not really clear as it does not summarize all the main points given in the essay. The writer should consider improving the conclusion. I would like to suggest that the writer to restate the thesis statement.

    7. Does the writer cite the sources adequately and appropriately? Note any incorrect citation.
    Yes, the citation is adequate and appropriate.

    8. Are there any apparent grammatical or spelling mistakes?
    No, there is no apparent grammatical or spelling mistake.

    9. Does the writer comprehensively cover appropriate materials available from the standard sources? If no, what is missing?
    Yes, nothing is missing in the essay and all the materials needed are covered well.

    10. Additional comments:
    In the 5th paragraph, you may consider changing “people are asked to…” to “people are urged to…” which may sound better.
    Overall, this essay is very good. Well done!

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